From Mann-O-Salwa By Umaira Ahmed

[Ali Akbar]

ba'z dfa insan majboor hta he,mgr hr dfa ni.

jb insan ghalat rastay pe jany lgta he to usy apna anjam nazr any lgta he.

kisi ki aolad ko bad dua do to wo apni hi aolad ko lagti he.

koi b insan sari dunya k lye ni jeeta blky sirf chand logon k lye jeeta he,jo us k lye
poori dunya hoon.

 

[tiny bud]

nice words but instead of "bazdafa" use "kaibar" or "bazauqat" Or "kabhi Kabhi". Because your writing takes your reader to the world of your own. now make your world as beautiful as you can so that your readers feels exactly what you want them to feel.